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This morning you, my true love
tapped a heartbeat into my door
with an oak cane.
I didn't answer.
I wasn't afraid of you, I promise.
In fact shaking swept over me
a feverish need to pull you in
rising from my chest to my throat.
When you left I coughed it out.
It lay there on my floor
thick and red, but not so much my blood
as my offering
my chance.
It is noon.
My neck stings and pulses
for you to kiss it.
But of course you won't.
Perhaps this attraction
the beauty I see in the way you're covered by a beast
is the same that creates
werewolves, minotaurs, and politicians.
I wouldn't want a man
so please, don't take your mask off.
Don't look at me without the glass over your eyes.
You live if they can't see you, true love of mine
and I want us to live.
I think you flew away
this morning, black cloak catching the filthy air
and roosted on top of the headstone they are building me.
I would rather succumb
than think you might be at another house
with a new girl you cannot touch.
I will call you back
and your leather gloves will be the roughest heaven
peeling this sickness from my skin
as if it's only paper.
You will trail your beak along my collarbone
scraping to leave red gashes that smell
of dead roses and bark and self-delusion.
If you arrive too late someone will have gnawed
boils into my skin and spit it back out.
You will only be able to return to your roots
and feed on me, you white-faced crow.
I won't feel you push that cane into my stomach
dissect the parts you could not save
raise each separate failed organ to your lips
to taste only your own perfume
stuffed inside your body.
You will never know me.
I understand that you are a rare creature indeed.
I understand all we won't have
but my true love, I'm ready to let you in.
You have to come back.
I am sick with longing.
tapped a heartbeat into my door
with an oak cane.
I didn't answer.
I wasn't afraid of you, I promise.
In fact shaking swept over me
a feverish need to pull you in
rising from my chest to my throat.
When you left I coughed it out.
It lay there on my floor
thick and red, but not so much my blood
as my offering
my chance.
It is noon.
My neck stings and pulses
for you to kiss it.
But of course you won't.
Perhaps this attraction
the beauty I see in the way you're covered by a beast
is the same that creates
werewolves, minotaurs, and politicians.
I wouldn't want a man
so please, don't take your mask off.
Don't look at me without the glass over your eyes.
You live if they can't see you, true love of mine
and I want us to live.
I think you flew away
this morning, black cloak catching the filthy air
and roosted on top of the headstone they are building me.
I would rather succumb
than think you might be at another house
with a new girl you cannot touch.
I will call you back
and your leather gloves will be the roughest heaven
peeling this sickness from my skin
as if it's only paper.
You will trail your beak along my collarbone
scraping to leave red gashes that smell
of dead roses and bark and self-delusion.
If you arrive too late someone will have gnawed
boils into my skin and spit it back out.
You will only be able to return to your roots
and feed on me, you white-faced crow.
I won't feel you push that cane into my stomach
dissect the parts you could not save
raise each separate failed organ to your lips
to taste only your own perfume
stuffed inside your body.
You will never know me.
I understand that you are a rare creature indeed.
I understand all we won't have
but my true love, I'm ready to let you in.
You have to come back.
I am sick with longing.
Literature
Virus
It began with a cough.
Just a simple cough, surely the result of some pathenogenic pest
Aggravating my lungs
Just for the hell of it. People make great hosts, you know.
The coughing quickly became hacking
Gasping for air and gagging from the ferocity of the bacterial assault
On my weakening body.
No doubt these microbes were resistant to medication.
I started seeing things.
Literature
Hello, Corvo.
Hello, Corvo.
I noticed you were having trouble-
I saw you stumbling in fear.
The Empress, cut to the bone,
Emily - no longer here.
I have pulled you here, Corvo.
Into my lair of confusion:
where space no longer resides,
and time is just an illusion.
My dear Corvo.
And so, bequeathed to you: a mask.
Given to you: a mark.
Taken from you: an empress.
Ripped from you: a family.
Plunged are you: into chaos.
Foolish, Corvo.
The more you kill, the darker it becomes.
Rats about, skittering for crumbs.
Weepers stumble, gritty and gruesome.
Blood is spilled, spilled, spilled - now under the ever-fading sun.
Interesting, Corvo.
You act non-lethall
Literature
Lullaby
"I've been waiting my entire life to tell you that I'm dying and I figured I'd finally get it over with.
So here I am, carving forgive me
into my teeth, so every time that I speak
I can still say that I'm sorry.
More years have passed in the last than I care to remember
but I could never forget:
In eighth grade my chorus teacher always told me,
'Michael, you'll never be good enough.'
and it always excited me. It reminded me of my mother.
On the last day of school she smiled,
her teeth jagged like a train wreck,
she didn't say a word,
but I knew exactly what she meant.
In high school I fell in love with a roadside bomb waiting to be deton
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You know the image, but not the function. This is a plague doctor: [link]
They took care of those dying from the bubonic plague in the Middle Ages. Plague doctors stuffed spices and flowers up the beaks to combat the "evil" air. And they poked people with canes to keep from touching them.
I write the weirdest love poems. That probably means I need more of a love life.
Critique request ([link] for )
This came out in a rush, and I haven't truly edited it like crazy, so critique would be smashing. I tend to either really hate my poetry or really like it, and I'm pleased enough with this one, but I know it can definitely be improved.
Most of my own problems with it deal with the reveal of the sickness. Love poetry is generally not strewn with descriptions of bubonic plague, and I tried to avoid the more disgusting parts of having your flesh rotting, but I need to know how it strikes the reader. Is it so gross it becomes distracting? Not vivid enough? At one point can you tell the narrator's sickness is serious? That she's dying?
Similarly the image of a plague doctor is well-known, but not the function. I've found no amount of description can create what a simple image does, but the black robes and white crow mask are important. Is the description of them powerful enough that you can see the plague doctor? At the end of the poem can you understand both why the narrator has fallen in love with him and why it could be considered wrong?
There are a few images in there that I'm less than impressed with. In particular, the "and politicians" line always gets a laugh, but I'm not sure that was what I was searching for. "I won't feel you push that cane into my stomach" isn't visceral enough for me. Your own opinions on them would be greatly appreciated.
I'm really curious to hear what you felt the overall message of the poem was, and your opinion of the two characters.
In addition, any thoughts on the rhythm, word choice, and flow are stupendous. And honestly, just as helpful as all I've outlined here, although I can't verbalize it as well.
Thank you.
They took care of those dying from the bubonic plague in the Middle Ages. Plague doctors stuffed spices and flowers up the beaks to combat the "evil" air. And they poked people with canes to keep from touching them.
I write the weirdest love poems. That probably means I need more of a love life.
Critique request ([link] for )
This came out in a rush, and I haven't truly edited it like crazy, so critique would be smashing. I tend to either really hate my poetry or really like it, and I'm pleased enough with this one, but I know it can definitely be improved.
Most of my own problems with it deal with the reveal of the sickness. Love poetry is generally not strewn with descriptions of bubonic plague, and I tried to avoid the more disgusting parts of having your flesh rotting, but I need to know how it strikes the reader. Is it so gross it becomes distracting? Not vivid enough? At one point can you tell the narrator's sickness is serious? That she's dying?
Similarly the image of a plague doctor is well-known, but not the function. I've found no amount of description can create what a simple image does, but the black robes and white crow mask are important. Is the description of them powerful enough that you can see the plague doctor? At the end of the poem can you understand both why the narrator has fallen in love with him and why it could be considered wrong?
There are a few images in there that I'm less than impressed with. In particular, the "and politicians" line always gets a laugh, but I'm not sure that was what I was searching for. "I won't feel you push that cane into my stomach" isn't visceral enough for me. Your own opinions on them would be greatly appreciated.
I'm really curious to hear what you felt the overall message of the poem was, and your opinion of the two characters.
In addition, any thoughts on the rhythm, word choice, and flow are stupendous. And honestly, just as helpful as all I've outlined here, although I can't verbalize it as well.
Thank you.
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I'm not gonna lie but this is so beautiful and I love this so much!!!