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first seed
Darling, you and I both know
in a better world I could be your Lethe
wrap around you, drown you
erode everything
that ever tried to bring your fate down on you.
Still if I picked up the pieces
I'd hear their soft hum—
the one shells moan for the sea—
for even then there would be places in you
still not free.

second seed
Surely women must have learned by now
never to trust fruit.
A garden is a prison earned
and there is nothing satanic, nothing sacred
about hunger.
Yet when your body curls in on itself
seduced by not-seeds that need only thirst to root
you find your lips wet
and what might be blood or juice
becomes the same as sweat.

third seed
Your skin is singing
I swear, hymns to the colors
the way the world's ringing hurts your ears
the salt of the Dead Sea come alive in your tears
the smell only in the sky as the rain clears
the poppy-eyed bud people who spend years
walking around, faces turned toward the light
thrusting pomegranate crown
fingers up up up to pray
as if the good lord giveth for reasons
other than to contrast what happens
when he taketh away.

fourth seed
If I was brave enough
I would plant my spit and bones and fingernails
and grow roses
when you build glass houses for your stones.
But I am no iron queen
content to perfectly decompose.
All I can do is lay down on your altar
dream of making the world barren
as my organs feel it must be.
When things that flowed under me have dried
screaming echoes into spiral shells
will never change the tide.

fifth seed
If only there would not be seasons—
but, oh, darling
I know he's idling between nerve endings
painting wine wings on your shoulder blades
his words sticking between
the back of your throat and swallowing
and I don't care, now.
You will, I hope you won't but you will
and still the world is alight.
Tinged in green, fit to bursting
it cascades through gaps in the boughs
of our tree of
you're the one who gives me
life.

sixth seed
Persephone, if this curse would let me
before you next depart
I would crown you queen of queens
give you rule over your 613-chamber heart.
In Judaism, the pomegranate is a sacred fruit because it's said that the average number of seeds is 613, the number of commandments in the Torah.

In Greece, there is still a mysticism of the pomegranate that goes back to Persephone and Hades.

Persephone's name translates into "she who destroys the light", just like Isis's name translates into "she of the throne".

A sequel to [link] , but very different because my feelings about the situation have changed and mellowed out.

This is the first poem I've written that's entirely from my own POV. Metaphors, but no exaggeration, my story to tell.

It's so good to be writing poetry again, and I'm really proud of this one.
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Given 2011-06-05
She who destroys the light by ~poetoffire flows through a garden of mythology, drawing in similar motifs from a multitude of religions to create a global, haunting poem. ( Featured by Halatia )
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EmmetEarwax Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2016  Hobbyist Writer
In my fan-fics, the pomegranate is called "the fruit of hell". I guess you,too, know why I called it that.
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tetrarchangel Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, I absolutely loved this. As I'm sure many have, since the DLD and DD.
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silverfleckedlullaby Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Fantastic rendition of Persephone! She's my favorite of all the Greek gods and goddesses because of her fascinating story and the parallels to Eve in Christianity. I love the raw violence in this poem, and the increasingly strident note of desperation that rings throughout.

Just as a side note, "If I was brave enough" is grammatically incorrect; it should be "If I were brave enough."

Great stuff, congratulations on your well-deserved DD :D
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2011
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DLD (Daily Literature Deviations) in a news article that can be found here [link]
Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by :+fav:ing the News Article.

Keep writing and keep creating.
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Daystar-Art Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Hey there, your work has been featured here --> [link] :)
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Username10012 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2011
I don't know much about poetry so bear with me here...

"I know he's idling between nerve endings
painting wine wings on your shoulder blades"


I really like those two lines. It feels like such a cryptic metaphor but it gives such good imagery and taste to the poem. Great work.
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kallia-goldenwings Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I just love the imagery in the piece. How it releaves how you feel about the fate that persephone must live with that at times must cruse her but you don't want it to cruse her. You want to make it seem like she had a choice like she wasn't fooled like she knwo what she was doing when she seeds or aleast she should have known this.
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poetoffire Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2011
Thank you. However, in the particular situation that I am writing about, Persephone doesn't have a choice, and I don't blame her for anything that happened or will happen.
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kallia-goldenwings Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
that is just so true but I think we want to think that she had a choice.
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HugsLee13 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You've layered this beautifully. I've read it and it's sister a good six times now and I think I've come to a good understanding of what you meant. I love how this piece makes up such strong images separately. Each stave and seed is a story unto itself. Once they're all viewed together though..... A beautiful portrait layered with allusions of all depths and kinds. Persephone would be proud.
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Thomas-Koidhis Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2011
Incredible. So beautiful. Well deserved DD.

More people should take the time to read in general, and this deserves much more attention. I admit I do not understand a lot of the connections and subtle references, and how they tie into who you are, but on an intuitive level I understand much of it. Being a bit of a writer myself (Maybe a poet, in some way...temporally or in the heart) I am very impressed by this.

You should be very proud!
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NarutoRoxMySox12 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2011  Student Writer
Stunning and so very gorgeous.
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NarutoRoxMySox12 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2011  Student Writer
Stunning and so very gorgeous.
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Outcast24 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
whoa, i just really really like this it is nice well written, and just... wow
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TheCriticofInnocence Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2011  Student General Artist
Wow... I bow to your skill in poetry.... Transcendentally Perfect...
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Gaia1390 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2011
This is lovely- I didn't know that Persephone and Isis had those meanings and the phrasing of the poem is beautiful.
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Lit-Twitter Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2011
Chirp, congrats on the DD, it's been twittered. [link] :)
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Vigilo Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2011  Student Writer
Congratulations on the DLD! Does my heart good to see some mythology related poetry. (:

In this poem, I especially love how you have modernised the myth and not made it sound archaic, instead reworking it to fit this time. I like, "If only there would not be seasons—/but, oh, darling/I know he's idling between nerve endings/painting wine wings on your shoulder blades" a lot. Absolutely beautiful - especially that first line, lovely. And the ending is absolutely gorgeous. "You will, I hope you won't but you will" is a bit off to me as a whole because it seems a bit - fireless? I am guessing it is meant to sound defeated, but it comes off just a little flat - but apart from that, this poem is wonderful. Well deserved on the DLD! :heart:
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ReinventReinvigorate Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I can certainly see why you'd be proud of this one, it's a knock-out. I especially love the lines:
I know he's idling between nerve endings
painting wine wings on your shoulder blades
his words sticking between
the back of your throat and swallowing
and I don't care, now.

There's something really cool and dark there, and it makes me a little uncomfortable, but I like it.

I have always loved the story of Persephone, and I think you bent it to your will very effectively here.

Congratulations on the DLD :)
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Philthey Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2011
This is wonderfully written, though it'll take a few more read-throughs for me to actually have more of an opinion than that which I'm rather looking forwards to doing actually.
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2011   Writer
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Congratulations on the DLD. You deserve it. This is, indeed, a "stunning" piece. Thank you.
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2011
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DLD (Daily Literature Deviations) and has been selected as our Pick of the Day. It is featured in a news article here: [link] and on our main page.

Keep writing and keep creating.
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OctopusGames Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2010
Your style is very much your own, but sometimes it reminds me of the same sort of caprice I see in Crowley's prose - nearly as mystical, not as blasphemous. I know little about poetry, so it's kind of hard to comment, but I can say that this is interesting to read, makes me ponder.
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