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Your slurred alibis burn on my tongue
Their tangy, intoxicating edges taking hold.
A little part of me I’d rather keep
Dribbles down in every dabble in you.
I lick the alcohol from your swollen lips.
You taste like bad beer laced with water hemlock
Trickling through my senses one drop at a time.
You coo against me, “I love you,”
Your breath smelling as stale as your words.

You are but the best of many I delight in
Picking up and putting down each night.
Hate follows the wine in my bloodstream
As careless, drunken lies spew from your lips.
Before I used to believe in that subtle chemistry
When the crowded bar faded into you, me,
And the alcohol that carried us into thoughtlessness.

Now I love not you but the very end.
I have waited long enough, lost in margaritas
And false promises leaving me shaken-not-stirred.
I am ready.  You smile as the road flashes by.
It reminds me of when I was a child and I dreamed
The drops sucked from bottles in the storeroom could drown it all.
But don’t despair, dear poor creature drunk on me
I have twenty different bottles waiting for you at home.
I have twenty different brilliant ways
To get you writhing on the floor
Pleading for death in those last shakes and sobs.

You’re in a hurry to go beneath the surface.
I laugh darkly. “How about a drink to seal it?”
Your fingers tremble as you select the red wine
I so carefully mixed in the jessamine last night.
You raise it to your lips and empty it like you emptied me.
A blanch; “Doesn’t taste right!”, lurch onto my bed
I grab you and hold you down, listening to your laughter
“Want me that bad, huh?” no-yes-no-of-course-not.

It takes a few minutes for the poison to flow.
You begin to push against me, struggling like they all do.
Faster, stronger, sweat dripping down your skin
Beautiful eyes wide and tearing up.  A scream rips from you
(God, why do they always have to scream?)
My hand slips over your mouth, herbs slipped in cocktails
And the shrieks won’t-stop-won’t-stop-won’t-stop.
Finally, they subside and your body goes limp.
My hands latch around your neck.  It’s just like opening a wine bottle;
I turn and turn and turn until it stops
And laugh until the poison in my senses subsides.
You’re dead, dear, but I’m the one who’s truly wasted.
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Not very good.
Some critique please?

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:iconliduen-kvaedhi:
That was brilliant. I love the last line especially, it closes off the poem with a bang. Excellent job.

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#WLC
#WeEmote
#dAmnEpic

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:iconalterego1629:
Amazing. Just purely amazing. The ending was a complete surprise :) I loved the bracketed part.

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¥~*I do not like the feeling that I am feeling while I'm feeling it
and when I'm done feeling it for the moment I won't feel wrong for feeling it,but right now I feel it and it feels wrong.*~¥ - (E.Soileau)
:icondopeyope:
love it :) i like the line "no-yes-no-of-course-not
:iconyourlocalpoet:
The content is what makes it "not very good" because it's not a good way to live, but many do. My advice is to get off the drugs and outta the business.

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"As a computer I find your faith in technology amusing."

"I love a battle of wits almost as much as I love clashing blades."
:iconpoetoffire:
The content's fine. It's just the poetry I'm unsatisfied with.

For the record, I have only tasted alcohol once, and hate it. The poem preaches against itself, I think.

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I would hurl words into this darkness and wait for an echo, and if an echo sounded, no matter how faintly, I would send other words to tell, to march, to fight, to create a sense of hunger for life that gnaws in us all. ~Richard Wright
:iconyourlocalpoet:
I'm not a fan of beer or wine really myself. And I'm legal. So come and get me :p But seriously. What's wrong with the poetry? And you know by business I meant off the street, ya?

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"As a computer I find your faith in technology amusing."

"I love a battle of wits almost as much as I love clashing blades."
:iconximcharmedx:
very dark, but then some of the best is. i liked it; the last stanza really brought the whole work together.

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Curiosity killed the cat, but satisfaction brought it back!

Confusion is a word we have invented for an order which is not yet understood. -Henry Miller

"She's like a sweet summer, a sweet summer day; I can't let it, can't let it go to waste."

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